Audience Feedback

Audience Feedback from Zoe Rice on Vimeo.

After watching my trailer i asked 2 of my peers to provide me with feedback by answering the questions which i asked them. Overall i got a very positive response with only minor adjustments being suggested by my peers.

I don't have enough time to tweak my video using the feedback which i've recieved, however i have learnt a lot from this feedback and if i was to do my trailer again using this feedback this is what i'd do differently:

- Cut down the clips so that there's a faster pace of editing through out my trailer as one of my peers said that some scenes were too dragged out

- Put more focus onto the female character by using more footage with her in it as my peer said that the trailer was too focused on the 2 male characters

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The 2 Goons (film trailer) from Zoe Rice on Vimeo.

Film Website

The 2 Goons Film Poster

Script For Film Trailer

INT. ALISA’S FRONT ROOM- DAY

Alisa is in her house having arrived home from the chase, she is still panicking and knows that she has to let a friend realise she’s in danger; she picks up the phone and dials a friend.

ALISA TITAN

Hi, it’s me, I need your help.

ALISA’S FRIEND (don’t actually hear them speak)

You sound worried, what’s wrong?

ALISA TITAN

These two guys are after me, I think they’re trying to kill me; I have no idea who they are.

NARRATOR: Two guys

EXT. ALISA’S FRONT GARDEN- DAY

Alex and Jack are outside with the gun trying to aim their shot.

ALEX TITAN

I can’t see her, we’re going to need to go around the back and kill her instead

NARRATOR: One Target

EXT. ALISA’S CAR- DAY

Alisa is exiting her car.

NARRATOR: One Goal

EXT. THE MOORS- DAY

The chase takes them all to the moors where Alisa speeds up and escapes, the men start to slow down and then realise that they’re run out of petrol so they start arguing. 

ALEX TITAN

I didn’t stop the car it’s run out of petrol because ‘someone’ didn’t fill it up!!

JACK TITAN

I thought that you were filling it up!

ALEX TITAN

I asked you too!

JACK TITAN

Well I didn’t think that we’d be in a chase

EXT. THE MOORS- DAY

Jack and Alex are doing target practice.

ALEX TITAN: You are using blanks aren’t you?

JACK TITAN: Of course I am

INT. ALISIA’S HOUSE- DAY

ALISIA: I’ll go and pack now and get out of here.

ALEX TITAN: Oh my god, you just shot her!!

NARRATOR: Until it all goes wrong.

INT. ALISA’S KITCHEN- DAY

ALEX TITAN: Ahhh!

NARRATOR: Graham Rice

INT. ALEX’S CAR- DAY

ALEX TITAN: Oh my God!

EXT. MOORS- DAY

ALEX TITAN: Is no-one going to pick us up?

ALEX TITAN: Ahh, God! 

JACK TITAN: We’re going to have to get rid of her somewhere.

ALEX TITAN: We’re going to have to bury her.

NARRATOR: Jon Rice

EXT. ALISA’S BACK GARDEN- DAY

ALEX TITAN: It’s too high powerful at close range.

JACK TITAN: I don’t think we need a gun anyway.

ALEX TITAN: She’s a lot more tasty than she looks.

NARRATOR: The 2 Goons.

EXT. MOORS- DAY

ALEX TITAN: Well Jack, I’ve managed to bury the hitchhiker.

JACK TITAN: You can’t leave it like that, look at it. If you’re going to bury it bury it, you can see half of her.

I decided to do a script for my trailer because:

• My actors weren't sure exactly what they had to do because i was explaining it to them as i went along. So providing them with a script allowed them to have more direction and structure with their acting, therefore allowing them to give a more convincing performance.
• Also it meant that when filming scenes from a range of different angles i could cut from one angle to another whilst the dialogue was still flowing. This makes the trailer more effective as the quick cuts keep the audience more engaged. For example if one of the characters said an improvised line but i needed to re-shoot from another angle they might not be able to remember the line therefore making difficult to cut part way through a shot.